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2/2/11 Ren. and Ref. 75. Good job on Ren, but much is missing. Works of art of Leonardo and Michaelangelo? No info. on indulgences, Luther's 95 Theses, Henry VIII, Elizabeth I, Shakespeare--all missing!

2/2/11 Greece. Four errors. Grade is 80. Athens. Zeus. Parthenon on the Acropolis. Solon. Mr. B.

citizens control their government by voting. This form of government was first started by Draconian. Later, during the Golden Age of

1/25/11

DANIELLA:

YOU EARNED 85 ON THE REN. AND REF. ESSAY. TWO MISSING PIECES OF INFORMATION: GUTENBERG AND THE PRINTING PRESS; AND SHAKESPEARE. ADD THAT INFO. GO FOR 100.

MR. B.

1/24/11 Daniella: You did not really finish your Middle Ages mini-chapter, because you did not turn the last dozen or so research facts/answers into sentenes that are part of your mini-chapter. Also, if you read the the first part you wrote, you'll notice that it reads in a rather "jumpy" way. You need to insert transitional phrases. You need to insert paragraph breaks when there is a change in topic. You cannot begin the essay with just the dates of the Middle Ages. Everything must be in complete sentences that are steps in a logical, smoothly developed paragraph.

Current grade is 70. Fix this. Raise it to a 100. Tomorrow, be focused in class (not silly, please) and work with me on fixing this. Ok?

Yours,

Mr. Baskin

DANIELLA: I HAVE REGRADED YOUR ROME ESSAY. THERE ARE STILL 7 NUMBERED ERRORS. SEE BELOW. THUS THE GRADE IS A 75. SOME OF THEM ARE SPELLING ERRORS. TIBER NOT TIMER. COLOSSEUM IS THE CORRECT SPELLING. I URGE YOU RE-READ THE PAGES IN OUR WORLD ABOUT ROMAN GOVERNMENT. BASICALLY THE ROMANS HAD THREE BRANCHES OF GOVERNMENT: THE SENATE, THE TRIBUNES, AND THE CONSULS. THE CITIZEN ASSEMBLY ELECTED THE TRIBUNES. MAKE FIXES TO THIS. GO FOR 100.

Rome Mini-Chapter The ancient civilization of Rome was founded on the Italian peninsula. The city was founded on the Latium Plain. The 1.Timer River flows through the center of the city. According to mythology, twin brothers named Romulus and Remus founded Rome. After Rome’s last king, whose name was Tarquinius was overthrown, Rome became a republic, which is a government in which the people elected representatives to speak for them and pass laws. (The U.S.A. has this form of government.) Rome was divided up into two social groups: plebeians and patincians. Plebeians are 2. law class people who work for patricians, who are rich land-owners. The patricians were not always fair towards the plebeians. So, the plebeians protested and got the patricians to publish Rome’s first set of laws. These were called the twelve Tables. The most powerful branch of Rome’s government was the senate. It was made up of republicans. It controlled law-making and how money was spent in Rome. 3. senates were elected by the plebicans from the Citizen assembly. They asked the 4. tributes to pass laws for the plebeicans. There were two powerful 5. branches. One was head of the consuls and one was a chief judge. Rome wanted to be the unquestioned leader of the entire Mediterranean region. So they went to war with the civilization of Punic over who would control the island of 6. Hannibal. These wars were called the Punic war. Julius Caesar was Rome’s first 7. master, which is an all-powerful ruler. Caesar was from a wealthy patrician family, and he had built up his power as a Senator, Consul, and later as a military governor of Gaul [France]. After Julius Caesar was stabbed to death by the senators, his adopted stepson, named Octavian Caesar, became emperor. Rome grew in power and in the size of the area that it controlled. The time when Augustus Pax Romania ruled was called the pay Romana, which means Roman peace. To pay for its huge building projects, Rome collected Tax money from those it had conquered. It counted the numbers of people whom it had conquered; they called this count a census. Roman soldiers built an immense network of Road. Water was carried to new Roman cities on raised water bridges called archs. Roman citizens enjoyed bloody entertainment in Rome’s immense collusm, which is where gladiators fought to the death.

EGYPT GRADE AND SUGGESTIONS ARE AT THE FOOT OF THE PAGE, DANIELLA!!
 * MR. B . **


 * Daniella: You earned a 90 on your Prehistory mini-chapter. To raise it to a 100, add a sentence at the end that explains what the Bronze Age was, what two metals are combined to make bronze, and what things were made with bronze. E-mail when you fix it and upload it. Ok? **

** Mr. Baskin **

** DANIELLA: YOU EARNED AN 80 ON YOUR EARLY AG. ESSAY, BUT YOU CAN EASILY TURN THAT INTO A 100 BY TURNING IT INTO LINKED PARAGRAPHS--AN ESSAY! PLEASE DO THAT ASAP. **

** YOURS, **

** MR. B. **

** DANIELLA: ** ** YOU EARNED A 95 ON YOUR MESO. ESSAY AND YOU CAN EASILY RAISE THAT TO A 100 BY INSERTING THE WORD "CITY" INTO THE DEFINITION OF A CITY-STATE: .... A POWERFUL CITY THAT CONTROLS THE ARE AROUND IT.... **

** MR. B. **